PROMISE

by

Nang Cho Mar Myint

(2)

(A 30 years old gambler must faithful his friend, if not he will meet with trouble.)

My Blog: (www.nangchomarmyint.blogspot.com)

Date: 1 Oct 2012

Notes:

Have you submitted in blackboard? YES / NO

Have you emailed the lecturer yet? YES / NO

lecturer: jeannette teo  

email: syteo@nafa.edu.sg

EXECUTIVE SUMMARY:

TITLE:

PROMISE

GENRE:

Drama 

1 SENTENCE SUMMARY:

A 30 years old gambler must faithful his friend, if not he will meet with trouble.

SYNOPSIS:

(Synopsis of your story here –2-3 para, double spaced)

CHARACTER LIST (All characters)

Key character Harry

Character  Jame 

Character Lucky 

CHARACTER BIO (Key Characters only)

(Character bio here – abt half A4 Page)

RESEARCH

(Newspaper clippings, magazine articles, blog, etc etc - Photocopies/Scan)

REFLECTION

(reflection paper – what have I learnt so far – 2 to 3 para, double spaced)
3 ACT STRUCTURE: (in point form below)

ACT1 SETUP	ACT2 CONFRONTATION	ACT3 RESOLUTION
Key Character(s):  Must-have Info:	Confrontation:	Climax (Grand Finale): Resolution:
MOTIVE: If he kill the dog, he will be in trouble.	TURNING POINT:	MOTIVE RESOLVED?
Conflict/Obstacles:	Conflict/Obstacles: Up the Stakes:	Moral of the Story if any:

TREATMENT / STORYLINE

Once upon a time, there is a poor young man and a gambler called Harry. He do as a site worker and live in a very small hut. He is the one who love to go gambling everyday. It is the reason, that he is poor. After his work he go gambling with his best friend, Jame. They go gambling together and always lose together. One day, Jame ask him to loan him money because he doesn't have money to gamble and he promise him to give back the next day. Harry give Jame his money and let him play. That night they fiasco all their money. The next day, Jame fall down from the 20th floor at his construction and past away. Harry feel very sad for his best friend. 

At the night Jame past away Harry has a wonderful dream. In his dream, he meet with a small dog and the dog follow him all the way. Suddenly, the dog talk to Harry that he want to stay with him. The dog also talk a very strange words, it said " I am your friend Jame, aren't you remember me? I have a debt on you, so i come and give you back. Please take me home with you and I promise, you will get a benefit for this." After this, he wake up from his dream, he cannot sleep back. 

 After a few week he forget his dream about Jame and he pass his day as usual. One night, when he come back from casino, a black puppy follow him. Although he try to make the puppy go away, it keep follow him. Suddenly, he remember the dream that he had, so he accept the puppy to follow him and take it together to home. After the day that the puppy arrive his home, his faith become higher. He get promote in his work and he win a lot in gambling. So, he named to dog " Lucky". After a few week, he become a billion-er ,so he buy a new house, a car and so on. He feed Lucky as his son and he love it so much. As he become a billioner a lots of girl like him and he got a girlfriend called Sara. His girlfriend is not a pet lover. One day, his girlfriend ask him that she want to follow his house. So, he is confusing to call her to his house. But Sara keep talking about this and she said if he doesn't  allow her, she will broke with him. So, he has no choice and he allow her to come his house. 

Today is the day, that Sara will come to his house, he is so exciting. And he afraid Sara will angry if she see his Lucky. That why he try to hide the dog. While he is thinking about this, he hear a bell and he know that it is Sara. He open the door for her and they have dinner together. Sara said, she want to look around his house. And she see the dog and she start angry. She said, " Harry, you know i really hate pat, especially dog and why you keep it in you house, why? why?" He don't know what to answer. And she continue," When i come next time, i don't want to see this dog anymore, so please throw away now." Harry got a shock. He can't throw away his dog. It is his best friend, how come he can throw away. Sara talk to him " if you don't throw it now, I will never meet you again and let break". Harry doesn't want to lose her, she is the first girl that he fall in love in his life. So, he decided to throw away Luck to the drain from his house. Then, he say sorry to Lucky and throw it all the way down. 

He dream a wonderful dream again and it is a nightmare. The dog come to him and said " why you so cruel? How come you can so vicious on me? You will pay for this, you should pay for your betray on your best friend because of a girl. The next day, when he go gambling he fiasco in casino and he become a poor again. The day that he sell his house, his car and his things, Sara go away from him. Finally he got regret and he mad. 

SCRIPT (max 5 pages – pls see brief)

FADE IN:

ACT 1 (SETUP)

SCENE 1: INT – NAFA CLASSROOM 5-24 – DAY

Write what you see here – this is for visuals…. For example: STUDENT1, STUDENT2, STUDENT3, OTHER STUDENTS are looking at the projector screen. Screen shows the teacher’s blog - instructions. Some students are frantically writing their scripts in a last minute frenzy to finish up their work. Those who have finished and are ready to submit, are waiting patiently for further instructions.

NARRATOR

It’s almost time to hand in the final Assignment! Class DM 2B & 2C are dying to finish up and hand in their beloved scripts!

TEACHER waves and calls for students to focus.

ME

(pointing to projector screen)

Do you see the new template? It’s on the nafawrites download page…

STUDENT1

Where? I can’t find it!!!

STUDENT2

URGH! AARRGGH!

What template? We’ve got a template to use?

STUDENT3

Why so troublesome ah?

ME

Because I say so. DOWNLOAD your new template NOW.

STUDENT1

Where? Help!

STUDENT2

(pointing at the web address on the screen)

It’s here! See?

STUDENT1

Oooooooooooh! Ok, thanks!

ME

Finished? Downloaded yet?

STUDENT1

Nooooo!! Wait for me!

(pause)

OK!! I’m ready!

ME
Now, fill in the template with your details and your work. Copy your work and paste into the new template.

(pause)

Every page must have your name, student number and page number – see top left, header.

The cover page MUST have your 1 sentence summary. It’s repeated inside. Why? The 1 sentence on the cover is your selling statement, the one inside is to explain what your story is all about.

(SFX: Students typing frantically)

Compile into one doc file & email to me! Then select all, copy and paste your work into your blogs to backup.

Students are looking at the projector screen and the teacher’s blog. Some are frantically writing their scripts in a last minute frenzy to finish up their work. The others are transferring their work into the new template and into their blogs.

SCENE 2 – INT – NAFA CLASSROOM 5-25 – DAY

STUDENT4 & STUDENT5 are in 5-25 are looking into class 5-24.

STUDENT4

Wah look at them!

STUDENT5

Look at what?

STUDENT4

See, the students next door are so hardworking!! And what are we doing?

STUDENT5

We’re rushing also la! Hurry up and help me…

STUDENT4

k..k…

The Story Angle : The gambler
The Log line : The competition between friendship and relationship.
Key character's motive : He need to faithful on his friend if not he will meet with trouble.
Feedback :
3 Act structure



Once upon a time, there is a poor young man and a gambler called Harry. He do as a site worker and live in a very small hut. He is the one who love to go gambling everyday. It is the reason, that he is poor. After his work he go gambling with his best friend, Jame. They go gambling together and always lose together. One day, Jame ask him to loan him money because he doesn't have money to gamble and he promise him to give back the next day. Harry give Jame his money and let him play. That night they fiasco all their money. The next day, Jame fall down from the 20th floor at his construction and past away. Harry feel very sad for his best friend. 

At the night Jame past away Harry has a wonderful dream. In his dream, he meet with a small dog and the dog follow him all the way. Suddenly, the dog talk to Harry that he want to stay with him. The dog also talk a very strange words, it said " I am your friend Jame, aren't you remember me? I have a debt on you, so i come and give you back. Please take me home with you and I promise, you will get a benefit for this." After this, he wake up from his dream, he cannot sleep back. 

 After a few week he forget his dream about Jame and he pass his day as usual. One night, when he come back from casino, a black puppy follow him. Although he try to make the puppy go away, it keep follow him. Suddenly, he remember the dream that he had, so he accept the puppy to follow him and take it together to home. After the day that the puppy arrive his home, his faith become higher. He get promote in his work and he win a lot in gambling. So, he named to dog " Lucky". After a few week, he become a billion-er ,so he buy a new house, a car and so on. He feed Lucky as his son and he love it so much. As he become a billioner a lots of girl like him and he got a girlfriend called Sara. His girlfriend is not a pet lover. One day, his girlfriend ask him that she want to follow his house. So, he is confusing to call her to his house. But Sara keep talking about this and she said if he doesn't  allow her, she will broke with him. So, he has no choice and he allow her to come his house. 

Today is the day, that Sara will come to his house, he is so exciting. And he afraid Sara will angry if she see his Lucky. That why he try to hide the dog. While he is thinking about this, he hear a bell and he know that it is Sara. He open the door for her and they have dinner together. Sara said, she want to look around his house. And she see the dog and she start angry. She said, " Harry, you know i really hate pat, especially dog and why you keep it in you house, why? why?" He don't know what to answer. And she continue," When i come next time, i don't want to see this dog anymore, so please throw away now." Harry got a shock. He can't throw away his dog. It is his best friend, how come he can throw away. Sara talk to him " if you don't throw it now, I will never meet you again and let break". Harry doesn't want to lose her, she is the first girl that he fall in love in his life. So, he decided to throw away Luck to the drain from his house. Then, he say sorry to Lucky and throw it all the way down. 

He dream a wonderful dream again and it is a nightmare. The dog come to him and said " why you so cruel? How come you can so vicious on me? You will pay for this, you should pay for your betray on your best friend because of a girl. The next day, when he go gambling he fiasco in casino and he become a poor again. The day that he sell his house, his car and his things, Sara go away from him. Finally he got regret and he mad. 

From Story to script

1. 1-Sentence Story Idea

2. Synopsis & Story Angle

3. Character Bio (or Character Bible)

- character motives

- situations, outcomes, key message

- dramatic sequence - one thing leads to another / chain reaction

4. 3 Act Structure

- identify setup, plots & sub plots

- create a hook/teaser

- turning points

- climax

5. Storyline

- follow 3 Act Structure

- use beats

- use scene breakdown

6. Script - Draft1

-use standard format

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7. Story & Script Editing

The screen play

.slugline = INT/EXT, location , time of day ( add on specifics, eg 1920's, flashack, moving car , dream )

. action = describes necessary details ( AV) and what is happening  at the moment.

. character names ( dialogue) = always in CAPS

. parenthetical ( in brackets) = how the dialogue is being said

.dialogue = what is spoken by actor

1 Sentence story idea
Bart take a photo of his dad and a dancing girl with a spy camera and because of this photo homer's wife ask him to get out from her house.

1 sentence plot summary
Homer's photo taken was spread by Bart's friend and Homer got a problem with his wife, his work and he tried to explain.

Synopsis
At a night party, Bart take a photo of Homer and and dancer dancing . And he unintentionally spread the photo. So, Merge, Homer's wife misunderstand him and throw out from the house. Then, Homer tried to explain and show Bart that he was wrong with this case and not to do it again next time.

3 Act Structure
1. Bart got a mail with his spy camera . They go to the night out party. He took a photo of Homer and a dancer dancing. And Bart unintentionally spread the photo.
2. After Merge saw that photo, she was very angry and throw out Homer from her house.
3. Homer tried to explain and teach Bart not to do it again.

1 Sentence story idea
Trying to become a good son. 

1 Sentence Plot Summary
The problems between his environment, his work, and his family. He is trying to be a good son. But his effort is not very smooth.

Synopsis
 Frasier is planning to work hard as a presenter of a phone-in show and he want to stay alone. And his younger brother, Niles ask him to look after his father who is injured in leg. Although he tries to be the best, his father is not thank to him. Frasier give his place to Martin, his dog and a stranger girl, Martin doesn't tel thank you to him. So, finally Frasier start angry and argue with his father.
In the next day, Frasier go to work. When he turn on the phone call, Martin apologist for his ungraciousness  and Frasier also apologist for his insensitive too. Finally, Martin say " Thank You" to Frasier.

Character Bio- Frasier Crane
 Frasier Crane, he work as a person who presenting a phone-in psychiatry show on a radio.
He is a very sensitive person. 

3 Act Structure
turning point 1 - he try to be a good song
final turning point - they decided to try
motive- to be a good son.

 

What Make a good story

WHAT MAKE A GOOD STORY

Characters are the main things that make a story interesting because it is the one which attract the audience and it can make the story stand out. Depending on the characters, the story can be interesting, exciting, boring, wonderful, sad, laugh etc…because the audience focus onto it and they bring the emotion of the story. The plot is the main part of a good story. The concept of a story can show what a story wants to say what message wants to give. A story cannot be interesting without a good plot because the character is following the plot. And it needs to make sense. I think the introduction or beginning of a story attracts the audience and makes it interesting. The audience will decide to read on or stop depend the introduction of a story. The place and the location also influence the audience because it can give us different feeling. The action, language and dialogue make the story awesome. And the important thing is the story must give us a key message. If the story didn’t give us a message, there is no meaning reading or watching this. The valuable outcome also can make a good story. Example, unforgettable character, knowledge, courage, sad, laugh, cry, etc… For conclusion, a good story depend on every things in the story, the plot, the character, the dialogue, the key message, the action, the place and so on. 

3 Act Structure

Set up
motive
situation
turning point
conflict

class exercise 1

Define the common term and give example
GENRE
- Different kinds of category /movie/story having a particular form content , technique ,
example - Horror,action, romance , adventure, comedy , drama, crime, fantasy, etc...
CLICHE
- an expression, idea or element which has overused and excessive familiarity.  And the outcome become very well known ending.
example - they live happily ever after.
STEREOTYPE
-A conventional or formulaic conception or image.
example- an actor has been stereotype as villain
ANTAGONIST
- Someone who against, oppose to or compete with other.
example - Tom in 'tom and jerry'
PROTAGONIST
- The leading character, hero or heroin
example - Jerry in "tom and jerry'
SUPPORTING CHARACTER
- the character that make the story and the main character more interesting
example- Donkey, dragon, puss in Shrek
COMIC RELIEF
- Releasing of emotion or other tension resulting form a comic episode .
CHARACTERIZATION
-to create or portray a character
Define with no example
Concept conceptualization 
-The general idea or plan for doing something
Theme 
-The collection of songs, color and other artwork
Pitch 
-Imaging and make it come true
Logline 
-The summary of a story
Character Bio
-The detail of a character in the story
Synopsis 
-The general view of a story
Story line 
-The detail of a full story.
Treatment 
-The extended communication of a story .
Development hell 
-Breakdown in development or trapped in the development.